Will someone quickly read my admissions essay?

Asked by Ben P
I am looking for someone to proofread my general admissions essay to a top national university. The topic is: "Explain an instance that showed the importance of diversity to you." Obviously for the sake of confidentiality and to prevent plagiarism I cannot post the essay within my question. So, if you would be willing to read it and give me advice, please respond "Yes" and I will send you the essay in a personal message. Thanks! whaticantbeme, i sent the essay to you in three seperate parts....thanks so much! feel free to give your critique right on the answer board. moe and vendetta...thank you for your responses, if i feel i need a second or third opinion i will be sure to ask you! :) and no, not UM....Stanford and Harvard and some others!