can someone please correct some of the errors that can be find in my cover letter? what else can be added?
Asked by calebplease know that English is not my primary language so i may have many grammar errors. Armando Rodriguez 1293 Maudis Road Bailey, NC 27807 October 22, 2007 Miss Ashley Berry Communication Instructor Nash Community College P.O. Box 7488 Rocky Mount, NC 27804 Dear Miss Berry: I am interested in the system administrator position you have available. Please accept the attached resume as it recently was advertised in the local Rocky Mount telegram. In May of 2008, I will graduate as a system administrator from Nash Community College. I believe that everything I have learned here at Nash Community College could serve your company to keep on succeeding as I has been. I greatly appreciate you taking the time to review my resume. I look forward to meeting with you and discuss my qualifications in more detail. I can be reached at any time through my cell phone, 252-315-9983 or through my e-mail address at anrodriguez704@st.nash.edu. Sincerely, Armando Rodriguez Enclosure
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Congratulations on your upcoming graduation. I would move your name address, etc., to the closing of the letter. Saying "everything I have learned here at Nash.... and "could serve your company to keep on succeeding as I has been" not only is poor grammar, but I should be it not I ......., omit that part, suggest the following: I was interested to see your job posting on ____________________for the position of System Administrator, and would like to learn more about this opportunity. I am on course to graduate in May of 2008 with a certification as a System Administrator from Nash Community College. I am excited about my education and look forward to obtaining a position in my new field. I am very interested in discussing any opportunities you may have that may be a match with my qualifications. Thank you for your time and consideration. I hope to have the opportunity to discuss the opening with you in person. Sincerely,
Congratulations on your upcoming graduation. I would move your name address, etc., to the closing of the letter. Saying "everything I have learned here at Nash.... and "could serve your company to keep on succeeding as I has been" not only is poor grammar, but I should be it not I ......., omit that part, suggest the following: I was interested to see your job posting on ____________________for the position of System Administrator, and would like to learn more about this opportunity. I am on course to graduate in May of 2008 with a certification as a System Administrator from Nash Community College. I am excited about my education and look forward to obtaining a position in my new field. I am very interested in discussing any opportunities you may have that may be a match with my qualifications. Thank you for your time and consideration. I hope to have the opportunity to discuss the opening with you in person. Sincerely,
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